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impaled
& wreaking havoc on these
young bones

more than endorphins &
planes out of control

pretending that if
not-so-masochistically

i--

p

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 d:

a manifestation
instilled in bedsheets
& ghosts
i saw them again last night. i thought i was better.

gah. more angst.
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golden-3point14 Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I really like this too! I love things with formatting (which I have given up on, dA is awful to work with on this, so more power to you).

Short but so much meaning.
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tubefed Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! The formatting was a pain (why, dA, why?), I swear. ._. I don't know why it flips out when you have it up; all the letters move...at lot.
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golden-3point14 Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeeep. Why can't it be more "what you see is what you get"...that'd be so much easier.
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tubefed Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
dA has some problems with changing the format...and making pictures darker.
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:iconfoxofebony:
I love the layout, it's so amazing and unique :D
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tubefed Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks! ^-^ That's very reassuring to hear~
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:iconfoxofebony:
:D Your work is always brilliant
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:iconfuckyourselfx3:
it has potential... though i like your other works better, but i always like that visualized poems a lot. Sometimes it is good to play and experiment with such stuff for a while, before writing a really great piece again, I mean I'm always using my DA journal to post the stuff going on iside of my head and mostly it is just stupid crap xD Srsly u r a good writer and not always writing the most awesome stuff is kinda normal i guess... i wanted to write smthn for acompetition this week and totally failed to write ANYTHING at all....
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tubefed Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the comment. :) This isn't exactly one of my best...it was experimental, actually. I don't work much with moving the format around, or poems so short. So, this was a bit of a new one for me...and it didn't turn out as good as I was hoping. /:
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:iconfuckyourselfx3:
well then dont be so critical of yourself if its just been practise^^ i always title stuff like that with scrap and thats it then ;-) people can write helpful stuff and i dont have to feel bad bout an experiment... i mean u can always do better if u rly try, dont ya?
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